You need to start with a plot hook. Frankly, no one cares about your characters morning routine, except maybe once they know the character at least a little. I did not bother reading beyond the third sentence due to how it started.
The structure is a little iffy. I would recommend rephrasing some of the sentences so they start with a wider variety of words. You also use a lot of unnecessary commas and semicolons which can be fixed fairly easily. When reading it i didn’t feel very immersed in the story. Maybe add more description about how she was feeling and the setting. Good luck!!
You need to start with a plot hook. Frankly, no one cares about your characters morning routine, except maybe once they know the character at least a little. I did not bother reading beyond the third sentence due to how it started.
The structure is a little iffy. I would recommend rephrasing some of the sentences so they start with a wider variety of words. You also use a lot of unnecessary commas and semicolons which can be fixed fairly easily. When reading it i didn’t feel very immersed in the story. Maybe add more description about how she was feeling and the setting. Good luck!!