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Sexyguynottaken_

You have said so much in so little words and I think that's the beauty of poetry. Your words speak more than they mean if you understand what a mean. Beautifully executed to the very end.


porygons_bitch

best example of *less is more* I've seen in a while. I don't have any ideas for criticism tbh. this works.


Thomwann

Wow! thankyou!


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This is how I feel most days, just trying to see the good in life. Well spoken indeed


Exact_Ruin6574

This poem made me think of Emily Dickinson‘s poem *” Hope” is the thing with feathers.* After reading your poem, hope is flying around in my room on this gloomy day. Thank you for making my day with this nice little poem :)


contemporary_disease

This is great, it put a big smile on my face. I think I agree with others that it works and changing it might not even be for the better. If you removed the first and last line then it becomes a more somber promise to oneself to try and enjoy life more, but doing so would also remove the comic aspect of it which I like so much. You are poking fun at yourself and every human, like you're saying "yeah we make the same promise every Wednesday and by Friday those expectations are washed away by dreams of the weekend." But that's also OK, we don't need to take ourselves so serious all the time and we don't always need to feel all the colours all the time; that'd be exhausting!


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I enjoyed this. The ornery part of me wants to ask what shade of grey, there are so many! But I won't. Thank you for sharing!