It's really good. The imagery is incredible, it communicates what actually happened better than just telling it literally ever could, and the language is terribly beautiful in places; the ability to depict ugliness through beauty is something I always find very impressive
Amazing. I enjoy the dynamic, underlying grief, loss of connection, maintenance of unwanted connection. There are so many meanings between your lines. The broken sentences, stand alone words etc all broke my pace of reading and added power.
It's really good. The imagery is incredible, it communicates what actually happened better than just telling it literally ever could, and the language is terribly beautiful in places; the ability to depict ugliness through beauty is something I always find very impressive
thank you so much! your comment means a lot ❤️
Amazing. I enjoy the dynamic, underlying grief, loss of connection, maintenance of unwanted connection. There are so many meanings between your lines. The broken sentences, stand alone words etc all broke my pace of reading and added power.
thank you so much! this poem means so much to mean and your feedback warms my heart ❤️